What would you revise?
How would you rewrite it?
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This week we are starting our work on the final Alphabiography. We are beginning with revision, going back through our writing from this 7th grade year. What if we could revise life in the same way that we revise our writing: find the places that didn't work or weren't clear and REWRITE them and fix them? Consider the past year of your life...are there things that you would revise? Are there lines you would rewrite? Scenes you would add or delete? Look back at this past year like a writer looking back at a poem or story.
What would you revise? How would you rewrite it?
40 Comments
Nate D
5/4/2016 08:16:20 pm
If I could change anything about the past year, I would conference more with both of my ELA teachers to get their different viewpoints on my writing and fix my work based on what they said. Also, I would try harder to more perfectly complete the writing process.
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Dom
5/8/2016 08:06:06 pm
I would need to conference more too with my ela teachers Nate!
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Tyler
5/5/2016 08:25:14 am
If i could revise life, i wouldn't. What has happened has happened and getting through the bad choices is part of life. I feel that I have made some pretty good choices, and my questionable ones are in the past now.
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Jacob Marshall
5/6/2016 02:23:28 pm
I like this.
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Dom
5/8/2016 08:05:02 pm
This is very true Tyler.
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Sydney Linkiewicz
5/5/2016 08:50:23 am
Looking back on the past year I would probably revise some of the projects that I had to do in class so I could take more time on them to get a better grade. Maybe I would revise how I spent my time over the summer vacation so I can really make it count. This year I am going to make up for that over summer vacation. I have a lot of fun stuff planned like my softball tournaments and my cousins are coming to visit and I can't wait.
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Jacob Marshall
5/6/2016 02:24:48 pm
I would've also revised some of my projects too.
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Jackson thomas
5/5/2016 08:56:20 am
I wouldn't revise anything that has happen so far this year. I believe that everything happens for a reason if it's good or bad. I do believe though that you can make the right choice that will affect your future.
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Ryan Collins
5/5/2016 09:25:51 am
I don't think I would change anything because everything happens for a reason. If I was to go back in time and change something, even if it was the smallest decision it could change something in my future. I could win the lottery in two days but if I change something even 10 years ago, it could easily be changed. Everything that happens has a purpose.
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Gunther Schnorr
5/5/2016 09:59:25 am
I would revise my detail and sensory in my essays and poems. Also I would make sure all of my punctuation is correct and there is no word spelled wrong. I would rewrite it and add more detail from the text and make sure I have quotes when I need them and I don't have quotes when I don't need them. I would also add titles to all of them that have to do with the so what. Thats what I would do to re-write and revise my poems and essays.
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Dom
5/8/2016 08:03:49 pm
I will also revise my detail in my essays and poems too Gunther
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Noah Marino
5/9/2016 08:58:10 am
I like yours.
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Kayla S
5/5/2016 09:59:16 pm
I don't think I would want to change anything about this past year. I would probably spend more time enjoying life instead of stressing about life though!
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Alec McVearry
5/6/2016 08:52:37 am
If I could revise anything in the past year, I would delete some of the times I got sick. I had to make up a lot of work! Other than that, I wouldn't revise anything. This year has been a good year for me. Besides, there have to be some challenges in life. If there are no challenges, you aren't living.
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Teddy Westfall
5/6/2016 08:52:54 am
I wouldn't revise anything if I could because if I could revise something the past would change which would end up changing the future besides the choices you make are your own and you might as well own them because they aren't going anywhere.
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Marshall Withers
5/6/2016 09:09:00 am
One thing I would revise on the past year would be how much detail and care I put in my writing. Also how much thinking I actually did instead of just doodling. Next time I would rewrite my poems and writing pieces with more care to give my audience a visual of what I'm seeing in my piece. That is what I would revise in the past year of my life.
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Jacob Marshall
5/6/2016 02:26:58 pm
I would also revise how much detail and care I put in my writing.
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Jacob Marshall
5/6/2016 02:22:08 pm
In the past year of my life I think I could've been nicer to my mom and dad. I think I treated them poorly sometimes and I really shouldn't have done that. I would also have worked harder in lacrosse and practice more lacrosse. This is what I would've changed in the past year of my life.
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Ryanne
5/7/2016 09:47:56 am
As people have commented before me I wouldn't change anything. If I didn't have the bad times there would be no good times. Everything happens for a reason. If anything, I would not stress out so much in my life and just live in the moment.
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Grace DiGiovanni
5/7/2016 01:31:34 pm
Although I believe everything happens for a reason, there were choices that I made this year that when I look back on, I would have probably would have taken more time to decide what was best. This year I got in a fight with my friend and we both said that we shouldn't be friends. Even though we ended up staying friends, I regret saying some of the things I said. While I was writing I didn't really try very hard because I thought I would just revise it at the end of the year. Since I did that, I have been very busy and stressed about trying to finish revising my writing pieces. There were several decisions that I wish I took more time deciding what was best but what happened happened and you have to accept that sometimes because in life something you will never be able to take back or "revise."
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Xavier Plourde
5/8/2016 09:53:22 am
If I could revise anything that happened in the past year, I would probably keep everything the same. I think that whatever happened last year is over now.
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Thomas Allport
5/8/2016 10:44:14 am
If I could revise the last year of my life, there would be many things that I would change. One thing I would change is that I would make sure I got my schoolwork in on time. I wish that I had read more books instead of spending so much time playing with electronics. I would edit out any time I yelled at my parents or friends. Whenever I said something mean, I would use auto correct to replace the words with something nice instead.
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Gabe
5/8/2016 11:51:12 am
I would probably revise how I did on quizzes and tests in school. I would rewrite each quiz/test and redo it until I got 100 on everything. One other thing I would rewrite would be my first track scrimmage. I didn't push my self and I didn't do as well as I could have. Those are the main things I would probably rewrite.
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Douglass Welsh
5/8/2016 02:29:34 pm
I would have worked harder on my assignments and earned higher grades.
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Andi Hunt
5/8/2016 05:16:12 pm
In the past year, the only thing I would have revised if I didn't have to stress so much on projects and getting projects on time. But other than that, I personally think that this year was a great year for me.
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Dom
5/8/2016 08:01:53 pm
If I could go back and revise something it would be my writing pieces.One thing that I would revise is going all the way though the writing process and not skipping any parts of the process. I would do this by signing up for more teacher and peer conferences and do more revisions and editing.
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Julian G.
5/8/2016 08:58:11 pm
I think that revising your life is a great way to make changes, for the better. If I could revise something this year, it would be to stop fooling around with Gabe as much (Gabe, if you are reading this, I bet you are laughing so hard that you are crying.) This would have helped me focus and get on task a little bit more, helping me get more work done. But, to be honest, I'm happy I didn't make this revision earlier in the year, because I love to have fun, even in troubling ways. :d
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Madi Ancone
5/9/2016 07:31:56 am
I wouldn't change anything that happened in the past year of my life. All the tough times happened for a reason and they all taught me a lesson. Plus, I had many amazing times and I would not want to change that.
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Stephen Oliva
5/9/2016 08:51:23 am
If i could revise whatever I could In the past of my life I wouldn't change anything because I think things happen for a reason.
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Noah Marino
5/9/2016 08:57:16 am
I don't think I would revise anything that happen so far this year. I do believe that everything happens for a reason good or bad. But I also do believe that you can change your fate if you make the best choice and don't make a bad choice that could get you in trouble.
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Sundus Abdel-Aziz
5/9/2016 09:20:21 am
Looking back in the past year I would probably revise some of my presentations and I would take more time and practice presenting, and I would also fix my mistakes.
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Jonathan
5/9/2016 09:38:59 am
In the past year I would revisit some of the projects I have done for various class. I would try to add more depth and detail to them. That is what I would revise from the past year of my life.
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jamo maclachlan
5/9/2016 10:57:54 am
I agree
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Jamo Maclachlan
5/9/2016 11:04:31 am
If I had to change anything from the past year it would be to look over all of my writing pieces and revise and edit them much more. I would try to add more detail and use capitals more often and end run on sentences and start new ones
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Khani C.
5/9/2016 07:19:32 pm
If I could change something I did in life I would probably not change anything because everything I did influenced the person I am today, and wouldn't change a thing. For example if I never accepted the police officer badge tattoo, I would have one of my best friends. Who is, by the way like a sister to me.
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Francesca Chirco
5/12/2016 09:02:56 am
I think that the choices that we make in our life are supposed to be made. On the other hand, there are many things I would change in my life. If I could change something, I would be nicer to my brothers and try harder not to get in fights with them and not say things I shouldn't have said. If I had done thing before, we wouldn't get in as many fights and we would be friends. Things we do change our lives in many ways and if I could revise and change those moments, I would. I wouldn't say those things to my brother and I would make things better.
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Colin Bennett
5/22/2016 10:49:24 am
I would revise studying less so I can study more.
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Will.Quackenbush
5/23/2016 03:01:41 pm
If I could revise something it would revise my writing pieces. When I get my grade or look back at the piece maybe a week later. I see the simple mistakes that I missed
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Keeley Riley
6/2/2016 09:19:24 am
If I could revise something I would revise how much effort I put into my pieces. On some of my pieces I barely tried to make them good and I regret that.
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Kayla Green
6/3/2016 11:57:59 am
If I could revise something in my life it would be all my efforts in life.
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